Daisies in a Vase Critique

I got my critique back from Daniel Edmondson from his beginners still life course. The subject is daisies in a glass vase.  This oil painting is 18 X 24.

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18 thoughts on “Daisies in a Vase Critique

  1. Good critique. Is this your last painting for the class? I didn’t see anything wrong with either the light or the reflections on the glass. I know he pointed them out, and he’s probably right, but FWIW I loved the painting just as it is.

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    1. Thank you very much Judith. I want to say this is was class 5 or six. I didn’t send in the first of second to him and he seems to be going in order I think? I think I have sent him 5 paintings, am not going to send the first two and I have one left to do. Two or the classes were about blogs and setting up still life. Anyway, the final painting I need to complete is Jasmine and peaches. I gotta get jazzed up for fruit. 😱 and since I have to prepare for camping this week and will be gone I won’t get to it this week. Maybe next when I haven’t painted for a while and am rearing to go paint peaches. I might take my supplies with me this time…who knows.

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      1. Take supplies or at least take a sketchbook (or a camera). Even if you don’t paint while you’re camping, you’ll get lots of inspiration to bring back to your easel. Have you done any more excavators or other machinery?

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        1. I will take at least those things and I am thinking about sneaking some acrylics and extra canvas to try and talk my sister in to painting. I’ll do oils. She says she has no creativity and can’t paint. She is on her 6th or 7th art Sherpa painting, but she did owls 3 times and she does the girls with the umbrellas which are adorable and look great in her bedroom. I wonder if I can talk her into painting a flower or river or trees. I think it would be fun.

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        2. Our daughter in California is coming back this summer to visit, and we’re going to do some watercolor painting together. I think it’s going to be a lot of fun. I hope you can talk your sister into painting with you.

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        3. Excavators. Bah! I’m trying to talk the bro in law into something more fun for me, like maybe gears and stuff like that. I think the paintings will be better if I enjoy doing them. He just got a new office building and they are all a bunch of dirty ground hogs working there. In fact, his nickname is groundhog. So him and I need to think about what kind of art groundhog dirty excavating guys will like. They seem to like video and photographs of dirt and big machines but surely there is a compromise?

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  2. Dawn, I love the light that shines so brightly on and in your flowers. Love that gorgeous red background. Your colors blend so wonderfully together. I always enjoy the leaves and petals on your tables also. I agree with him re: that highlight, I think it would really make the vase pop out of the background. I hope you’re happy with this one! It’s lovely!

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    1. Thank you very much Laura. Am I happy with this one….hmmmm….I completely agree with the comments about the light but I also think I did a sub par job mixing my yellows that day and they look chalky to me? I definitely put the highlight in the wrong place on the vase. There is something about the composition of the flowers I don’t like. I have the same problem with the marigolds….like it is too round or too uniform or something…I can’t pin point it exactly, but I think that is what is bugging me. I do like the red background and I do like the petals and leaves on the table and for being the first time I had done a glass vase of flowers, I’m gonna give myself a pass on this one. I might try this one again in the future though rather than trying to fix it.

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        1. It was a still life class with Daniel Edmonson and this one I actually followed along as closely as I could. I had done that pot of daisies a few weeks before and I painted a fish bowl in December of 2015 and back in the early 2000s (that one was excellent for a laugh). That was the extent of my glass experience…oh yeah, I did that martini glass but I can’t remember if that class was before or after the daisies. all of the ones from his classes are from his pictures and his set ups.

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    2. I think one of the other things is that this canvas is way to big for the painting. I think it would have been nicer on something like a 12 X 16 or maybe a 14 by 18? Smaller.

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        1. You know, he actually gives suggestions on canvas sizes for different set ups and does warn about distortion as things get to big and the need for more detail the bigger things are, but I already had the 18 X 24 out and was too lazy I guess to walk 10’feet to get a different size.

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